• OfCourseNot
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    65 months ago

    And how about a haiku?

    Need pediatrician My son unvaccinated Just kicked him out

    • @Wilzax@lemmy.world
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      25 months ago

      That’s not a haiku, it needs to be 5, 7, 5 syllables not 6, 7, 4.

      The separation of lines matters, it’s not just 17 syllables.

      • OfCourseNot
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        45 months ago

        Ha! You caught me! Well spotted!

        But now seriously, I’ll try to address your misconceptions:

        That’s not a haiku

        It is.

        it needs to be 5, 7, 5

        Not really. That’s like the definition for kids in school, simple but not 100% accurate. There’s plenty of haiku with different metrics, even single syllable lines.

        not 6, 7, 4

        I count 5-7-4.

        The separation of lines matter

        Iirc in Japanese haiku are written in one line.

        You are kind of right tho. I think it sounds better like ‘He just kicked him out’ but I was trying to making it just taking out words from the original post.

        • @Wilzax@lemmy.world
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          25 months ago

          “Pediatrician” is 5 syllables on its own, so “need pediatrician” is 6.

          Japanese haiku rules who? If it’s English and I can’t sing it to the Jacksfilms Haiku tune, I’m not calling it a haiku

          • OfCourseNot
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            24 months ago

            You are right on the counting. Thanks for the correction! I must’ve read ‘-dia-’ as a diphthong, I don’t think I’ve ever said ‘pediatrician’ out loud until now. Still a haiku anyways.

            And that tune, almost none of the haiku fit the melody! For singing you have to take into account the accents and on beats. Don’t get me wrong I had a good chuckle and may or might not start doing it myself but as a rule of thumb to recognize (or gatekeep) haiku is not the best.

            Reading one-line haiku