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Cake day: August 1st, 2023

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  • On the positive side: I really enjoyed how it switched at the end between the third person (that gave a feeling of impartiality) to a first person, basically admitting bias along the text.

    On the critical side: to make it a bit relatable,the reader needs to understand why you would ride a behemoth, and here most of the writing is about the negatives, so it’s hard to take the warning seriously. The reader is brought to think “Nobody would be that stupid! We will just handle it better” - a slightly more nuanced approach would make it more insidious and believable as a threat I think. In particular the final with the crazied king is over the top…

    Overall: well build, good rhythm and nice idea. I ho sempre enjoyed the read! Thanks!












  • “Latest hack you figured out”

    As a new parent, there have been countless little hacks shared with me that really helped my life. The first one: “sometimes babies just need to cry it out” (within reason). Helped me drop the parent guilt of hearing your baby cry and not being able to fix it right away.

    Latest one: if you are excited, they will likely be as well. (Experiences of potty training)